Heavy Rain in Tangerang: A Motorist Killed by a Fallen Tree in Jatiuwung (News Gathering UTS)
Gathering:
1. What happened?
Motorist Killed by Falling Tree in Jatiuwung Tangerang
2. When did this accident happen?
It happened on Sunday, November 05, 2023, afternoon.
3. How did the accident happen?
The incident occurred when drizzling rain flushed the area, at around 2:40 pm. Suddenly, a 100 cm diameter mongrel tree on the side of the road fell and immediately fell on the victim.
4. Where did the incident occur?
In Cikoneng Girang Village, RT03/03, Manis Jaya Village, Jatiuwung Subdistrict, Tangerang City.
5. Who was the victim in this incident?
The victim was Solih, 27, a resident of Manis Jaya.
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Annisa Triyulianita W, November 5 2023
The victim was crushed to death by a kedondong tree while passing through Manis Jaya Village, Jatiuwung Subdistrict, Tangerang City, Sunday, (November 5, 2023) (abouttng's image)
Tangerang - A fallen tree in Cikoneng Girang Village, RT03/03,
Manis Jaya Village, Jatiuwung Subdistrict, Tangerang City, claimed a life on
Sunday, November 5, 2023, afternoon.
One Honda Beat
motorcyclist was crushed to death while passing by at the scene. Head of the
Periuk UPT at the Tangerang City Regional Disaster Management Agency (BPBD)
Kamaluddin Azizi explained that the incident occurred when drizzling rain
flushed the area, at around 2:40 pm.
"Then, the victim
named Solih, 27, a resident of Manis Jaya, passed by the location riding a
Honda Beat with license plate B-3055-COL," he said.
Suddenly, a 100 cm
diameter mongrel tree on the side of the road fell and immediately fell on the
victim.
"The victim died on
the spot with injuries to the front and back of the head, abrasions to the
right hand and abrasions to the right knee," he said.
The officer who received
the report immediately made efforts to evacuate the victim's body by cutting
the tree trunk using a chainsaw.
The evacuation process
was assisted by a joint team from BPBD UPT Periuk and BPBD Mako Keroncong Post,
PLN Gandasari Rescue Team, PKM Manis Jaya Medical Team, Laka lantas Metro
Tangerang Kota Police, Jatiuwung Police and the Tangerang City Culture and
Tourism Office Slash Team.
"The victim's body
was successfully evacuated at around 3:45 p.m., then immediately taken to his
house," Kamal explained.
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